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down on the hot sand
hear the waves crashing in
the blue water swells and sways
shells are scattered about

bodies lay all around
heat overwhelms you
you go down for cover
shells are scattered about

the gulls turn into vultures
the waves explode on contact
all the men swell and sway
shells are scattered about

there you stay
on a crowded beach
where so many others rest
shells are scattered about
©2004-2009 ~rentspace
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simple day at the beach... or hellish day in the heat of battle...

let me know what you think.

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:iconxxbrokenone:
ah. i feel the heat.
:iconinlezorn:
very nice babes =D I love how you repeated that last line on all the stanzas :w00t: I kinda wanna go to the beach now but you make it sound sooooooooo hot!!! so maybe when it cools off :giggle: great poem cutie :smooch:

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oooh, nice double meaning with the shells! i didn't even get that until the last line. is this about normandy?

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:headbang: :laughing: :happycry: 8-) :O :bleh: :crazy: :yawn: :hmm: :ignore::fear::O_o: :worry: :disbelief: :giggle:
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:iconrentspace:
when i was writing it i was thinking a bit about d-day. i needed somthing that everyone would be able to connect it to. so yes, in a way it is.
a long while back i read this poem "War is Kind" and that also got me thinking about something like this.
also, all the crap goin gon now.

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crap= not good. poetry, however = good!

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:headbang: :laughing: :happycry: 8-) :O :bleh: :crazy: :yawn: :hmm: :ignore::fear::O_o: :worry: :disbelief: :giggle:
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ah the beach so hot and sandy and oh god i cant take it......sorry i have not slept in 2 days i am a little weird right now

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